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The bells of the church tower chimed proudly as the announced to the world that midnight had struck. Little Johnny Flynn’s cries would have been drowned out by the noise if it wasn't for the fact he was gagged, as he struggled to keep his head above the water. The full moon peered down the well shaft, her pale face mocking him as he attempted to scramble up the slimy walls and sliding back down like a spider being washed down a water pipe by a shower of rain. A silhouette appeared in amongst the moon’s gibe, it leaned over the edge and Johnny could make out the heavyset body of Tommy Stout. Tommy’s face looked grey and it wasn't just the light that made it so, his eyes were unpitying and his mouth a long line as if someone had cut across a watermelon with a scalpel.

“Do you understand now?” The boy asked, his viciously soft voice echoing down the well, “This is how it feels to suffer, like the animals you torture, it’s not nice is it?” Johnny knew that this was about, the week before he had dropped Tommy’s stupid cat down the same well. Tommy had caterwauled over the mangy old feline, it wasn't like the cat did anything except catch mice in the farmer’s barn. “It doesn't matter now though, I’ll forgive you” relief filled Johnny’s heart to hear this Tommy was going to let him go, or at least he thought, “Because you’re going to give your life in exchange.” If shock and dismay had physical mass it would have pulled Johnny straight to the bottom of that well of horrors. However Johnny didn't realize exactly what Tommy had meant by ‘in exchange’ until he felt something wet a furry brush against his leg and claws dig into his ankle.

In my extension English course we have to submit a major work, I've chosen to do a series of short stories based on Nursery Rhymes, This one is based on Ding Dong Bell. I would appreciate feedback, and suggestions for other short stories.

 More stories to come!


Other Nursery Rhyme Stories:
One Two Buckle My Shoe

Original Nursery Rhyme:

 

Ding, dong, bell,

Pussy’s in the well.

Who put her in?

Little Johnny Flynn.

Who pulled her out?

Little Tommy Stout.

What a naughty boy was that,

To try to drown poor pussy cat,

Who ne’er did him any harm,

But killed all the mice in the farmer's barn

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Smurfette123 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Student Filmographer
NICE WORK!
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Kaida-Mizu Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you XD
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Smurfette123 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Student Filmographer
YW!:happybounce: 
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beautifuldread Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Student General Artist
Cleverly written! I love the ending. : D
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Kaida-Mizu Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, you've given me so much confidence for my HSC.
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beautifuldread Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh you're welcome! :3
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